Natural Night Light Beams (Photo credit: ViaMoi)
Walking on this earth like a beam of light
As I take each step, I wonder if they know me
I remind myself, does it even matter
I must be careful and not lose my way
All I want to do is be king of the world
I release my kingdom knowing how it works
The more I release the more comes my way
I ponder this abundance of the light
I am walking on this earth like a beam of light
Everything I want it soon blows my way
Now I know this and I walk so freely
I am connected, I am connected
Craig
That’s what’s up
“I release my Kingdom” That’s one powerful and deep line. Thank you.
That is my favorite line in the poem. I am glad you liked it too. Thank you.
I like the ending. I would blip the “on.” By nature of the definition, “ponder” just takes a simple direct object. But of course feel free to delete this comment or ignore my 2 cents. =)
I ponder on this abundance of the light
Thank you. I am glad you like the poem and the ending. The idea of this particular ending was to summarize and put emphasis on the rest of the poem. I also thought about what you said about the word ponder, and you are 100% correct. But I must say it is very hard changing it, once it is done. I am debating. Thanks
It sounds quite better without the “on”.
Might interest….
https://aholisticjourney.wordpress.com/2013/05/25/the-writing-process-save-spit-part-2/
I’m really not trying to convince you. Just sharing my two cents, as this exchange is what blogging is about. You have all the license in the world to write as you please.